Luck’s Fortune

Her fortune said, “Not likely to happen”.

Challenge accepted she said to herself.

A song in her heart started toes tappin’

Guarded for too long, she slid from the shelf.

“A penny for your thoughts,” he said, laughin’.

Rich beyond measure, his love was her wealth.

The murky bottom of the well is wise:

“someone loves to see the light in your eyes”.

 

dVerse  – Frank is hosting and asks us to write Ottava Rima poems.

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32 comments on “Luck’s Fortune

  1. There is always the risk that money is all you see…

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  2. Loved the dialogue and inner dialogue, especially the line, “A penny for your thoughts, he said laughin'” which gave a vivid immediacy to him.

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    • colorfulpen says:

      Thank you. I had a couple of lines for a different idea that just weren’t working when I thought of using messages, or parts of messages, I’ve gotten from a ‘fortune telling’ bath fizzy and actual fortune cookies. The line you mention is something that someone used to say to me.

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  3. frankhubeny says:

    I liked this phrase: “his love was her wealth”. Also that was a nice ending about the murky bottom of the well and the next line talking about light in one’s eyes.

    There may be a typo in the last line. I think “loves to the see” should be “loves to see” if I am reading this correctly.

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  4. Skillful use of the fortune cookie fortunes! Makes for a good read.

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  5. This one trips along lightly and happily. Lends itself perfectly to the metre.

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  6. jillys2016 says:

    The imagery of the tappin’ toes and the ‘slid from the shelf’ give this such a playful feel. Enjoyed reading!

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  7. The murky bottom of the well is wise:
    “someone loves to see the light in your eyes”.

    A witty take, Lynn! How beautiful it is to have someone cares for you! A great feeling it is!

    Hank

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  8. Singledust says:

    “someone loves to see the light in your eyes”.- love this lone , such a beautiful feeling you evoke in this poem, feeling of not only being loved but wanted for the inner beauty that shines through the eyes. every line brings me closer to finding the secret of a real love.

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  9. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:

    A delight to read.

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  10. Charley says:

    This is delightful and just open enough to allow me to fill in blanks. As poetry ought to be.

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  11. rosemawrites says:

    love how this one flowed. 🙂

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  12. Janice says:

    I enjoyed this very much…a contemporary feel in an older form.

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