The Circus Comes to Town

Caravans shimmer
a plume of twinkling stars, and
foolish prophets shoot
pickled vodka.  Vent about
slow rhythm and growing chill.

Sunday Whirl – and the words this week:  caravans, shimmering, rhythm, plume, stars, *sheets (left this one out), chills, shot, vent, pick, prophet, foolish




12 comments on “The Circus Comes to Town

  1. jillys2016 says:

    Pickled vodka as opposed to pickling vodka 🙂 HA! This is so replete with imagery! The ‘slow rhythm’ gives pause to ponder. Have a great week, my friend 🙂

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  2. qbit says:

    Shoots pickled vodka – wonderful.

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  3. Fun of a night out can be most challenging to young people. But it is to have fun that is important!


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  4. jillys2016 says:

    Oh, and ‘pause to ponder’ is a good thing. Thought-provoking.

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  5. Nice Lynn, I find myself being lulled by the movement of the caravan, which increases the twinkling effect of the stars. Like clowns, there’s always, for me, a hint of mystery, magic with a travelling circus and prophets shooting pickled vodka and the coming chill make me think for what dark purpose they imbibe and what manner of bane makes the vodka pickled !
    Pretty impressive imagery you’ve created in 5 lines !

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    • colorfulpen says:

      Thank you, Nigel. For some reason, I like to use the tanka form for these wordles. It’s short and structured. Tough to fit 12 words into 31 syllables and make it have any substance. I originally had ‘foolish pickled prophets’ on one line but in sticking with the form, it was one syllable too short, and one syllable too long and I couldn’t figure out how to fix it, so then it became ‘foolish prophets shoot’/pickled vodka. I saw them as a band of misfits, a traveling circus with clowns, gypsies, and the fortune tellers (the prophets) as a sideshow attraction. I definitely wanted to create that element of mystery and magic. They also get into a little bit of mischief when they roll into to town, at least in my mind. 🙂

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  6. jerennazuto says:

    Beautiful poem!


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