Snake Bite

Day 12 of 28 Days of Unreason

“The beauty of the rattlesnake is in its threat” – Jim Harrison


She walks in stilettos, a pointed smile 
full of venomous charm
slides in beside you, don’t be alarmed
she licks her lips in the mirror
reflection shivers
your head starts to rattle
when you hear her whisper,
“Bartender, I’ll have a snake bite.”
And you know it’s true
she’ll shed more than those shoes
and you’ll be a done for dude.



20 comments on “Snake Bite

  1. jerennazuto says:

    I’m not sure I completely understood but this is beautiful. A beauty that was vividly expressed in the quote continues in your words.

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  2. qbit says:

    Nailed it with both fangs!

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  3. Ah, a cautionary tale both erudite and interesting, chalk up another hit !

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  4. Frank Hubeny says:

    That flowed very well. Now Harrison’s quote makes sense.

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  5. jillys2016 says:

    I keep going back and reading – this is spot on! LOVE it! The mirror is an essential part of the overall painting of the character. I know this snake. She’ll shead more than those shoes – yuh huh. Your head starts to rattle – great play. You sculpt evil really well.

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  6. Charley says:

    Dang! It’s dangerous to give you these Harrison quotes! Either that, or you live in dangerous country. She’s slithering, he’s dithering, she’s offering shedding… he should be dreading. Reptile cool!

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  7. Jael Sook says:

    “A done for dude”–what a fabulous phrase!!!

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